Yes as my assistant VD says, it makes me sad to see someone go out of their comfort level before it's time and create horrible pieces like this. Keep working hard Eric... you'll get there by honest evals... not fluffy feel good shit.
once again. This piece is badly unsaturated, linework is terrible. You are creating shit on people that can't be fixed, covered up OR removed. Get some more honest opinions by professional artists so they can help you get a better start